Week 01 Story Synopsis

Right So this is the first blog of many to come on the long road i like to entitle "the eternal struggle" but this is the first week and the pressure is on to get this show started, the better the start the better the end, fact. Oh its exciting and i quite luckily had allot of work already done on this project which has given us a little head start.

Anyway the first week then. I worked solely on the story this week. I wrote a more in depth story synopsis, which a went over heavily with Becca. The main criticism i received for the story was that it was a little complex and that the story as a whole felt to large. The weight of the film fell heavily on the outcome of a entire race of peoples outlook on racism. which was far to complex to tell in two minutes also leaving the main characters feeling light on development. So me and Becca rewrote it to be more self contained. Meaning the boy started out prejudice against 13 (the machine) and going through his own personal development.

It worked far better in terms of story and practicality to make. It made the characters feel more real. We then took the story to Mike who seemed far more positive with it. He also gave us advise on the boy and an extra scene with a radio which helped to portray the boys back story as to why he had these preconceived notions of discrimination. Rather than just blind ignorance.

We also took it to Jared who really broke the back of the problems with the story. He had lots of helpful suggestions and with only a quick tutorial from him i felt allot more confident with the material. By the end of the week and going over it with rob i managed to pound it into something i was very happy with and the tutors seemed to be pleased which was a big turn around i felt, from there once first pessimistic view.